Your voice is a bit quiet as well as you sound almost concerned throughout most of this recording. For a narration like this I would suggest you try to get a bit more relaxed, either get the mic closer to you or up the volume on the mic, and try to speak a bit more clear and have your words be a bit further apart from each other so it doesn't sound quite as rushed.
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"David" was the bowie knife you bought and had engraved to prove a point when you were fifteen, everyone who said it was a waste of money couldn't get the awesome joke. At least that's what you told yourself. Anon looked concerned.
You held onto the side of the bed with a kung-fu grip that would make G.I. Joe proud. It was all you could do to avoid being tossed around like the rest of your things.
