Good job giving tons of energy in your first read. I would call that your Energetic read, not your natural, as it's a bit over the top but perfect for this exercise. You had a moment of mushy sound - so something to listen for. Your lips are closing together for that so that's what's happening and your mouth wants a drink LOL . - but it was only in that one moment. You took your time, were nice and clear. Good work. Projected etc. Watch you have a few SPIKES - meaning it was too loud so it distorts so be careful of that. Your character spot was fine. Good on following the clarity and getting the letters well rounded. But the character kind of was predictable so make them more interesting so it's not predictable in your rhythm. If you clapped at one point, good efforts being physical, but you don't want to clap in the mic, everything should be audible. If you didn't then disregard, it was a mouth noise. Good work though. Thanks for submitting