Voices From The Outer Ring (Lead Role Re-Opened)
John_L for Jaska
A young man who has lived a fairly average life thus far. Jaska never went to college and instead jumped from job to job while making a small circle of friends. Never really an ambitious man, Jaska found himself in a comfortable cycle of making a typical paycheck and hanging out with his circle on the weekends. Everything he has, he's worked for, and he's considered among his friends as the "voice of reason." At heart he is an observer; always taking in his surroundings and the people around him. Initially, Jaska is gentle and meek, but when he's dragged into the conspiratorial pull of the city's various factions, he soon learns to tap into burgeoning heroism to become something greater than he already is.
His voice should be medium-pitched with a warm tone. Keep in mind that this is a lead role, and will require greater commitment than the supporting and minor roles due to significantly more reading. Please only audition for this role if you are certain you will be able to consistently submit lines in a timely manner.
[Optional: You don't have to do this, but I would like it if you introduced yourself and state what made you interested in this project.]
(Narrating) "I remember the night I first met him. I was working a part-time shift at a convenience store. He came in one day, face bloodied up, looking like all kinds of hell. Despite the number done on him, he had a smirk on his face. I'll never forget it. It was a devil's kind of smirk. A 'You think I look bad? You should see what I did to the other guy' kind of smirk. He didn't speak a word. Didn't ask to use the phone or have me call a doctor. He just went and grabbed a six-pack of cold ones and slapped a twenty on the counter. The first thought that came to my mind was, 'Man, this guy must be some sort of badass.'"
(Introducing himself) "You know, we've been bumping into each other for a while now and I never really got the chance to know your name. I'm Jaska, but you can call me Jas."
Thank you for auditioning. I appreciate your two separate takes on the read. The pitch and tone of your voice match that of the character and you keep up a consistent pacing for the narration. In your first take, it appears that you dropped the word "like" before the phrase "all kinds of hell." It may not seem like a big deal, but it takes away from the integrity of the sentence. Though you're able to match the tone of the character well, your voice appears to suffer a bit from hypernasality, and your second take comes off as tired and fatigue. This was all I had to say, thank you again for auditioning and reading my feedback.
Thanks for the feedback! Upon relistening the second take definitely does sound exhausted, and I'll look into hypernasality, I've never been told I had a nasal sound. Thank you again.