Voices From The Outer Ring (Lead Role Re-Opened)
Waglington for Writers
When applying for a writer, provide a link where your sample work can be read. To be considered for this project, please follow the guidelines below:
1) State who you are, why you want to be a part of this project, and anything else I should know about you or anything else you want to say about yourself.
2) Describe your character. Biography, personality, and just about every detail you can provide. Remember that your character should fit in a cyberpunk/urban fantasy setting. If your character has any unique abilities or powers, please note that they may be subject to be toned down or altered at my discretion, if I feel it is necessary.
3) Write a scene for your character to demonstrate your writing style as well as how your character interacts with other people and the world around them. Though there isn't a limit to how long this can be, I would recommend no more than two pages worth. Don't worry about the actual world of the story, I'm only looking for what you can provide in a standalone work.
Say something you think would fit
Sorry the scene was a bit long, but I was feeling the momentum and couldn't stop.
Thank you for your sample writing piece. First of all, I will assure you that it is not at all an issue to get "carried away" with your writing. It tells me that you have the drive and motivation and you go by your natural flow. As for the writing itself, I would say you have an interesting pair of characters that would indeed fit with the theme of the project. You write in good syntax, and your characters exchange a working dynamic as seen in their dialogue. My main issue would be the "exposition" in the piece. As a writer, you've probably heard the phrase "show don't tell" at least once. You want your story to live vicariously through your characters rather than rely on narrative text dumps to convey your plot. The biggest offender was the line "until the girl got shot." You didn't need to put that there, and it would have been better for the readers to come to that conclusion by themselves when they got to it. Your final line on the other hand was a good attention-grabber and left me curious for more. It seems you already have plenty of experience writing and I do believe you have the potential to refine your style. I may be getting back to you soon when I decide to begin making final decisions.
Thanks for the criticism! I know I do have a bit of a problem with exposition and have been actively trying to work on It. Glad you enjoyed my characters, though!
Please give me your Discord so that I may contact you.
Alright! I PMd it to you!