Voices From The Outer Ring (Lead Role Re-Opened)
Mairieus for Artemis
Daughter of an ex-assassin, Artemis was born with a superhuman ability to command darkness. She was brought up to never wear her heart on her sleeve, and as a result she appeared cold and distant to her peers to the point where she has trouble holding an average conversation in her present age without it drying up. Her loneliness has given way to depression which in turn has led to a borderline misanthropic outlook. One of her greatest fears is the feeling of being trapped - chained down to a one-track life devoid of greater purpose. As a teenager, she combated this fear by keeping vigil on the streets as a masked heroine and foiling crime with the use of her powers and skills that she inherited from her father. During college, she settled down into a comfortable apartment with her younger sister. Throughout her years, Artemis spent much of her free time learning computer science and programming; developing a knack for writing code and becoming familiar with cybersecurity protocol. She currently shares her knowledge on an anonymous dark web chat, regularly speaking with other members to discuss their latest developments. Despite having never seen their faces, the other members of the online chat have proven to be Artemis's closest friends. The desire to escape from the mundane soon overtakes her, and she eventually decides to take up the mantle as a vigilante once again.
Her voice is best described as soft, yet at times strained and flat. When annoyed, it becomes sharp and snappy. When happy, her voice is sincere, gentle, and silvery. Her normal tone of voice will gravitate towards a more somber feel. Keep in mind that this is a lead role, and will require greater commitment than the supporting and minor roles due to significantly more reading. Please only audition for this role if you are certain you will be able to consistently submit lines in a timely manner.
[Optional: You don't have to do this, but I would like it if you introduced yourself and state what made you interested in this project.]
(Narrating) "I could smell the lies coming off his breath like the stench of his last drink. I needed answers and he was playing around. I don't ask again. I break the glass over his face and I grab him by the collar. I've done my research on him - I know some of the things he's done. That's why I don't feel bad when I break his nose. I avoid the jaw in case he finally decides to loosen up his lips. Wanna know the really fucked up part? The feeling of caving in his giant pig snout is fucking electric. It's giving me a rush I haven't felt in a long time, and now... now I almost don't care if he doesn't talk. Either I get what I'm looking for, or I get a stress doll in the form of a human punching bag. I can deal with this."
(Announcing herself) "Corey, I'm home. I brought some takeout from down the block - they were having a special on orange chicken; hope you didn't fill up on chips while I was gone. I'm gonna take a quick shower and I'll set up dinner. Also, you might wanna turn down that movie or at least invest in some headphones. I don't want the neighbors coming over because they thought we were getting murdered again."
Hello, thank you for auditioning! I'm very sorry for my delayed timing in giving you feedback, but better late than never. I will be consolidating my entire analysis on your three auditions on this one comment block so that I won't have to make three separate comments. First of all, you do have an interesting take on the characters (I will say your Katya is probably the best of the three). For your Katya audition, you certainly match the tone and make a very passable read for the character. You seem to have a knack for playing the more bubbly types. For Artemis on the other hand, I'm sorry to say your audition wasn't quite a good fit for her. I intended her narrative lines to be more grim and suspenseful, and if I were to make any grievances towards the auditions overall, I would have to point out that I've noticed some plosives in your recording as well as some white noise in the background. In your Cornelia audition, I noticed a bit of clipping at times and one instance where you made a pop with your "p" sound. Moving on from the technical and editing aspects of this analysis, for your actual voice and acting performance, there were substantial awkward uses of pauses, audible inhaling, and a lack of enunciation. My advice on improving would be to really "get into character," by which I mean don't just read off the script. Read the lines as if you were a real person having a real conversation. Try improving the flow of your words and pronounce them clearly. Each word in a sentence can be just as important as every other one. This is all I wanted to say, thank you for reading and auditioning. I hope this helps you and by no means do I intend for my criticism to be negative.
Hello, thank you for your extensive feedback! I will definitely keep in mind all the points you have raised in my future voice acting!