Dragon Ball: SHAKUGAN ~A Dragon Ball Fanfiction Series~
EasyBreezyVA for Rikku Tsiuama
Rikku Tsiuama is Reizo's first and best friend who trains alongside him within the Shakugan Dojo. While she does have a bit of a short fuse and likely to find any excuse to get on Reizo's, or pretty much anyone's case, she does love a good fight and will go as far as to antagonize someone to get one but when push comes to shove, she will fight her hardest.
(calm, annoyed, and/or angry) Oh, stop it. All I did was sent my fist across your face. You trained to be as strong as a rock. Stop being a baby and suck it up.
(Nervous/Embarrassed) S-Shut up!!! ...Stupid fucking flirt...
*Various fighting noises, including a "Kamehameha" and/or "Shakugan BURST!"*
I do like the sass you had in the 1st line as well as the 2nd attempt of the 2nd line ( since it really catches that flustered nervous Rikku has ) but I will admit that you could have tried to include a bit more energy in order to capture the ferocity I'm looking for. It's not a bad audition. FAR from it. Although, it could have been better.
Do you think from this comment if it's okay i can try again and use the tips you gave me if that's okay