Dragon Ball: SHAKUGAN ~A Dragon Ball Fanfiction Series~
Jayte for Reizo Nakatomi
The main protagonist of DB: Shakugan, Reizo Nakatomi is a teenaged young man and an aspiring martial artist within the Shakugan Martial Arts dojo. He isn’t the nicest of people as he has somewhat of a bad attitude, although he does show care and concern towards his family and those he chooses to care about, his resolve driving him to focus on nothing but becoming a great and powerful martial artist, seeing stuff like studying for college or getting a job as complete wastes of time.
(calm) Come on, Usagi. Don't tell me that's all you got.
(annoying) Was the flying kick REALLY necessary, Rikku?!
*various fighting noises. Be sure to include a "Shakugan BURST" if you can*
Not bad! Not bad! I like your take on Reizo's voice here. ^^ The first and second attempts at the first line were spot on and do like the edge of teasing you added in for the third. As well as the energy used in the attempts of the 2nd line and the fighting sounds. Good one!
Thank you!
Great man!!1