Hey there! Loved your voice, and you have a very good feeling of confidence behind it, which is a good selling point! I have two big pieces of feedback I'd like to give.

First is striving for a wider variation between takes 1 and 2. If you play them back to back they're very very similar. One habit people get into and need to break is the subconscious unspoken thought that the second take is just another chance to improve the read you just did. But now I've got TWO performances to listen to and as the listener I really haven't gained anything. I have very little feeling of what you bring to the table any MORE than I did after listening to the first take. So a few things you can consider... you could change the voice completely. Give her An accent, a vocal quirk, raise or lower the pitch, etc. OR, my personal preference, change the scene in your head. You don't have anything but the line to go by, so the sky is kinda the limit. "I never charge you anything, Clint does. (grinning) For now." Where are you? In a garage, at home, on the phone...? Who are you talking to? A customer, a family member, an enemy? Do you like them? Hate them? indifferent? Are you trying to joke around with your buddy who you give free stuff? Is this someone who EXPECTS free things, and you've about had it? Try to build a scene in your head that you're going to act... and in the second take, change it around! You can have the same exact voice with two DRASTICALLY different reads if you change the setting or the character you're speaking to.

Second thing is ... ... shoot, hang on I had a second thing. Gaaaaaaah, brain... I got so into the first thing I'm forgetting what I wanted to say. Pthp... fooey. It's gone. SORRY I KNOW I had something else I wanted to say! xD

Hey, great read! I hope that this idea works out for you! I'd love to hear another audition down the line and see what you decide to do with it!