Nice read Michelle, you had a great feeling of confidence through the read that fits the saleswoman character well. Welcoming as well.

Let's start off with a note on projection here, we got a nice 5/10 here in voluime, like you were face to face with our prospective customer. A bit soft to be addressing a gym full of people though. We really want to redouble the air support we're giving to the script, take in much more air in great big breaths and use our diaphragm to push out that air and deliver strong supported lines! We want to imagine our voices carrying all the way to the people in the back of the gym who aren't paying attention and really command that attention and hold it! Let's see if you can go up to at least a 7/10 I think you have that in you! Expand that dynamic range and control!

Secondly, lets go over pacing. We had a strong control over the pace, though we still had a few moments where we sort of stumbled in the script. Because of that, I would ask you to slow down even more. Give yourself a little more time to read through and plan your delivery a bit more. That way we can read a little further ahead and minimize those moments where it seems like we were sight reading the script and it caught us off guard. The delivery speed itself I thought was fine, just give yourself more of a break between lines to read ahead and plan the delivery.

Nice read overall Michelle, looking forward to hearing more!