Great submission! You did a fantastic job getting through the entire script without stumbling over any words and you had clear enunciation throughout. I thought you could have put some more energy and emotion into it, which would have helped with projection. Adding some variance to your cadence and delivery could have helped as well, since so much of the script is essentially just repeating itself.

The projection is going to need some work here, I'm looking for the sweetspot of an 8 when it comes to the projection aspect and currently this read feels like we're at a 4. 

Your pronunciation and enunciation is good, but i feel that it starts to falter during the latter half of the read, stamina is something that is so important when it comes to reading. 

One thing that I'd like to see a bit more of, also is a bit more of a smile, I found myself trying to look for that smile alongside your projection. 

Along with that this read is too consistent and feels like you're reading a script as opposed to having a conversational speech to a crowd of people. Remember to change things up when it comes to reads like this, think of the conversational feeling, how we speak to one another, we change how we say things, how we change tempo, pause, etc. 

Good work and a good start! Can't wait to see how the lessons go!