There are points that this sounds a bit too fast for me, excitement for your friend is good, but if you are going to be reading to speed up for excitement, we're going to need to see a bit more pronunciation on it. 

I can tell the clear choices of starting off a litte excited, but that slowly builds up into some of the most genuine excitement. There's a bit of a choice to make it sound like you're trying to figure out hte words, but then it creates a bit more stumbles that isn't working for me. Try to slow it down, so there's a bit more room to let this story breathe. 

There's a good outlook into the attempt at a grounded read, and I love hearing your natural excitement go through, it's just a little too much, so I would ask to dial it back a bit more. 

There's a little consistency when you talk about the cities, specifically on the word, “And”. Try to change up the pacing, tempo, and how you emphasize the word “and” as it becomes a bit consistent. 

Great work! Can't wait to see what you bring to the table next week!