There is a bit of consistency when it comes to this read, I felt that the “Droning Effect” took a bit of control when I was listening to this. We have to introduce a bit more of some different changes when it comes to this read. Just gotta mix some of the choices a bit more, and maybe go for a bit more of a bolder choice.

There are some apparent choices throughout this, we just need to see a bit more on some reads like this, try to think that your audience, the children, are currently not going to pay attention throughout this. We need to have a bit more of a bolder choice when it comes to something like this.

But I can tell that you have some great fun with this, I can feel the physicality, we just gotta make a bit more bolder and apparent choices to avoid that annoying droning effect.

Great work! Great grasp on the lessons so far, let's end next week strong!