I would like to point out that this is only a portion of the script also, please make sure the next time that this is all of the script that is to be read. 

The volume is fairly low, turn the gain up for a bit. Be careful of the pronunciation and the enunciation of the city names, “Rennes” is pronounced as “Ren”.There is a clear focus on “trying on a bit of a darker tone”, this comes off as fairly consistent and I would like to see more of a change up when it comes to a read like this. 

Even when it comes to giving a “creepy” read, it's more than just trying to sound creepy, you have to make clear choice, at some points giving different angles to the rread, the unpredictable nature of the read is what causes it to be different. 

From what I heard, this was good, we just have to add more. I'll see you next week!