Be careful of the word, “Lutein” it’s pronounced more as “Loo-Teen”. 

I understand that you missed the word Mint, but sometimes missing a word can change the line entirely, please be aware of something like this when it comes to reading. While this is something that doesn’t change the line, yes. But it’s good to get in the habit of making sure that we’re reading the script fully. 

This read feels very stilted towards the beginning, there are a couple of awkward pauses in the beginning that I feel is trying to simulate sadness, but it comes off as a bit awkward. But as the read goes on, the read becomes a lot more conversational when it comes to it. We just gotta hit those conversational tones right as we start reading. 

This read feels a little too sad, and while I understand you’re reminiscing on someone when it comes to this read, I would like to point out that there are points where you can allow yourself to be happy, allow yourself to smile so you can really help sell the sadness when you read. There are some moments where you come off as happy, but it feels very slight, try your best to make it more obvious at points. 

Great work, there have been some great improvements since you’ve started!