So first things first, good pronunciation on Nasturtium! But we gotta work on the pronunciation for “Carotenoid Lutein” How to break it down phonetically it would be like this!  kr·aa·tuh·noyd loo·teen 

Very good on having your audience in mind, trying to speak with her, But I feel like that this was moreso trying to tell someone what Mrs. Mary Nillimore means to you, as opposed to Mrs. Mary Nillimore herself. But still there is a connection and a clear cut to what your audience is like. 

One thing that I want to comment on is that this is too bitter, it focuses a bit too much on the sad. There are bits of happiness in there, and it’s a good way to really make this sound conversational. There are points here too that you are fighting back the tears, which is a GREAT choice, but it sounds a little too forced. There are some awkward pauses, so we just gotta make it flow just a bit better.

Adding in the sweetness to the bittersweet can also exemplify your choice at the end to really let the tears flow through. That you really know that she’s not all there due to her illness. But that sweetness, makes your character realize that you want the good times to come back, but in reality, unfortunately they’re not there. And showing that smile a bit more obviously, you will be able to really let that emotion ring true.

Great progress so far, keep practicing!