I appreciate you taking my request into consideration! First thing I gotta call out is the pronunciations for Nasturtium and Carotenoid Lutein. The phonetic ways to pronounce it would be closer to nuh·stur·shm and Carotenoid Lutein is closer to kr·aa·tuh·noyd loo·teen

I can tell in this moment for this read, that you're talking to a good friend during this moment. You're just kinda talking and nailing that conversational read with it. There's a focus on trying to smile through the pain when it comes to this read, which is good, but I feel that takes over a bit too much in my opinion. I feel there could be a bit more of a sadder tone to this, adding more to the bitter to the term, “bittersweet”. Right now this is too sweet for me. 

I want to acknowledge that you are sounding happy specifically when you talk about Mrs. Mary Nillimore, this is good! It adds that humanizing, grounded read on it. But again, as I've mentiioned before hand, we have to make sure that you need to communicate a bit clearer the bitter side to make this sound a bit more changed up.

In terms of pacing, there are points where it feels stilted just a little bit, while it sounds pretty conversational in the way of a conversational read. It tends to be a bit more consistent, so let's try to change that up just a little bit more. 

This all in all was a good start to a grounded read, now we just gotta add a bit more layers to make this good, a great.

You're only at the halfway point of these classes! Let's keep pushing! You've definitely been putting everything you've learned into practice!