HW Review

Hey Taki! Excellent work in establishing your audience while also clarifying WHO your character is at the same time. The relationships that you, the speaker, has with the audience can impact the performance in a variety of ways. WHO you are speaking to matters, but so does who YOU are portraying in the scene.

There's a couple of details that would be good for you to consider when utilizing the W's method alongside future scripts. The audience is your niece, okay. HOW old is your niece? HOW long has she been in a wheelchair? WHEN is this act of you reading this book taking place? WHERE are you and your niece when this scene is taking place? Break down your scenes in this way and you'll find yourself getting more connected with your character and the scene which will in turn enhance your performance.

There's a small misspeak at 1:29 where you say "She went round and round" when it is written as "She went round and around".

I did pick up on some of those accidental mic bumps. I love that you're expressing physicality in the performance! I know how tough it can be to wanna express with physical movement while being stuck in a small space. Expanding your recording space can definitely help! You can also practice using smaller movements to reduce the risk of bumping the mic.

Mouth clicks are completely normal! Some people will experience more of them because, well, we are all different! The shape of our mouths and lips, how our tongue moves when we speak, and even how much or how little saliva we produce will vary person to person. It's pretty crazy how dry your mouth and throat can get just from talking a lot! Luckily there are ways to mitigate your body's natural reaction to that. You can reduce those mouth clicks a little by swallowing more often, gently clearing your throat, brushing your teeth before recording, and sipping on some warm liquid every so often to keep your mouth from feeling like it needs to over-compensate with saliva when you're going through a long-form script.

This was a solid read. I love the smile in your performance as you're speaking with your niece, and the occasional additives of subtle "chuckles" and "mmhmm!"s. Thank you for submitting!