"Evermore" [A full length 3D animated series]
nullify for Jaune Craddock
[Amused as he finds the claim ridiculous.]
1)"Similar? Us? We're both street rats, 'bout all the similarities we have. Example, I don't go walking around scowling at everyone."
[Irritated and a little disgusted.]
2)"You use that word, Malignant, like being one robs a person of their humanity. Is that really how you see people? Hell, you're a Malignant...is that how you see yourself?"[Should have a somber tone, like he's reminiscing while also being a little silly.]
"You know, when I first met you, I thought...this chick is in desperate need of a vacation. I still think that but it's not the point. Point is: I understand 'why' now. I understand why no matter how many times or how hard life knocks you on your ass, you always come back swinging. That kid really is something special, has this way of making you forget about all the...unfair shit in the world. I get why you would go so far to protect that. Just remember: That little girl isn't going to want a future where you're not there beside her."[Should sound distracted at first, as you near the end of the line his words become more direct and focused.]
"~And to answer your question...the reason I can run dick first into this manmade hell is because I have someone worth fighting for, someone that deserves a tomorrow. Certainly more than most do. You really just can't help but to love the girl...and 'love' makes us do crazy things...and yeah, this? This is crazy."
I'd appreciate feedback if possible.
Enjoyed the audition, delivery of the first line was really good. Tone was good too. Your pacing was a little off however on the other lines, almost like you were in a rush, especially the last line. Delivery was a little odd with which words you decided to put emphasis on and choice of pauses. While I like that you can get that intensity in your voice, seems a little misplaced for, "This is crazy." While in the line 'A2' the intensity was faint, if there at all. You also seemed to stiff up as the audition went on, which there was no need to, as you started on a high note. With proper direction, I do feel like you could provide a good performance. Thanks for taking the time to audition and interest in this project.
I do want to emphasize that I did enjoy your audition. I know with all the critiques, it can seem like the opposite is true, but giving critiques so that you can improve is my main focus when giving feedback. I myself find it difficult to audition when you're not playing off someone as having the dynamic of another can make a huge difference. Personally, I'm not good with shorter lines so the fact that you conveyed it as you did impressed me. If you'd be interested in re-auditioning with those critiques in mind, feel absolutely free to do so. I'll look forward to it.
First of all I'd like to say, thank you so much for being completely honest about my audition, and even going as far as to take each line as it's own section of critique. Normally all I get is, "nice voice" from directors, but knowing where my faults stand I'll make sure to work at them and reaudition ASAP if allowed. Once again thank you so much for giving me this feedback I know it must've taken time to write and decide, and I'll make sure to take every word of advice to improve my performance. Thank you, expect a reaudition from me soon.