First things first, you missed a word in the beginning, “What’s all the buzz around the new Berret Burrow’s Bug Blood Bonanza?” Please be wary of that. 

When I first hear this read, the energy feels consistent. It’s more energetic than a normal speaking tone, yes. But there’s not much offered when it comes to a difference in energy. I’m looking again for that inconsistency, especially if you’re going to go for a more animated read for this. The reason is, we think of the high energy, yes. But the major thing that we tend to forget is how low energy they might be, so when they get back into the high energy realm, it gives a good showcase of range, try to look at it more as not just how energetic you can be, but how far you can take your energy.

The zombie noise was okay, but it could’ve been a lot more sillier when it comes to this, and a way to look at it is not just at the energy, as I’ve noticed that this is a main portion of my critique thus far. But look at the length at the zombie noise, and the differentiation of the energy throughout it, and also the action behind it. Maybe you’re a zombie that has just come back to life, and let it be shown in your voice. But those are just some ways that you can look into getting a bit more oomph into your zombie noise.

I’m noticing a little bit of a lack of energy towards the end, so try to remember the importance of stamina and the need to pace yourself, one of the biggest reasons why it’s good to change things up, is just like with pacing yourself physically, it allows you to rest and give a good burst. 

The lack of energy does cause the words to slur a little bit and causes the BGK’s to have a bit of lazy talk, just gotta tighten that up a little bit. 

Good projection, good stuff, keep going~!