Nice read! 

0:12 Mispronounced “Rennes”. I encourage you to take the time to look up how to pronounce words online if you aren’t familiar with them. Some great reference sources include Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/), youglish.com, forvo.com and You Tube Videos among other places (there’s a lot of options out there). You can simply type in “How to pronounce [word]” in Google search and it should give you several references. Try to avoid the robot ones though. For names in particular, I find Youglish.com a very useful resource. For this read, these are names of actual cities.

Don’t lose the endings of your words - keep in mind articulation and enunciation. 

Staying well hydrated will help to reduce mouth clicks during recording. A good rule of thumb is to hydrate well a couple of hours before recording and drink water in between as you’re recording to stay hydrated. 

As you progress with voice acting, investing in the RX series mouth declick plug-in is a very useful and worthwhile tool to have at your disposal to help keep the recording as clean as possible. 

I could imagine this read being a story for children at a library. Take a moment to think even further about your context and your audience. The more details you picture in your mind’s eye, the better. How many children? How old are they? What do they look like? Are there adults listening? Are you physically holding a book and need to take time to turn the pages? What time of day is it? How are the children responding? Are they bored and not paying attention? Are they totally into the story? How do they react when Robin did different things in the story? You can also put some opinion into the read. How crazy was it that after a wheelchair race, Robin ‘walked’ off the podium? 

Our goal as voice actors is to take the read off the page and bring it to life. Make it sound like we are talking and not reading. Telling a story. Add personality and character to the read. Children in particular love over-exaggerated things so maybe the read should be big, bold and dramatic. Maybe you need to read a little slower depending on the age group. Don’t be afraid to play with a script and really imagine the scene and the dynamics. 

I highly recommend VA 201 if you’re able to take it - it goes into the emotional rollercoaster and it can really help in taking the read to the next level.

Overall, solid read. Keep up the good work!