I liked your pacing and world building.

HW Review

Where: In choir at school

When: After school, about 2:00pm

Who: You're a student in the class and the audience is your classmates and the teacher

Why/What: The teacher has presented a tongue twister challenge for pizza. You decided to go first to just get it over with.

This is a great breakdown of your W's to establish the scene!

Your articulation and clarity are very good! The only spot in which your articulation faltered was at 1:52 where it sounds like you say "crown" instead of crowd. You also followed the script almost perfectly, with only one mishap at 1:37 where you add a word and say "coming up in" when it is written as "coming in".

Pronunciation is mostly correct, except for Rennes. This is pronounced "Ren" or "Ren-uh" with a very subtle "uh" at the end. Remember, even if you think you know how something will be pronounced, it never hurts to do a quick search to make sure you have the correct pronunciation, especially when it comes to names and locations.

Let's talk a little bit about the performance itself. You do sound like you are reading. Normally this would not be desirable for voice acting, but considering the setting for this script, it works out quite well!

Now, because of the setting of the script where you have this student who is given this challenge to read a tongue twister as quickly as possible, I don't think you would've gotten the pizza. The pacing is a bit slow, and you add a lot of pauses; some of which sound out of place and unnatural.

If you were in this setting, would you read the tongue twister this slowly and with so many pauses? Sure, you went first cause you just wanna be done with it, but does that mean you're going to let someone else beat you? No way! You gotta show your teacher and your classmates how awesome you are and how quickly and clearly you can do this! You gotta set an example!

OR, you can completely fumble it over and over as you try to get through the tongue twister, in which case the slower pacing and awkward pauses would completely fit into the script. Mess up, restart, mess up again, restart, until finally you get through it successfully. "Phew! I'm glad that's over!"

Put yourself into the shoes of the character you're portraying in the setting that you've created. Practice with this kind of mindset and allow yourself to play within the scene a little bit.

This is a very clean read. You did a great job with all of the points we've been practicing in class! We definitely want you to maintain those practices, but you can also experiment and have fun with your performances as well!