Beautiful job with the script! Loved the genuine emotion and remembrance you put into the read. Fantastic conclusion on it too. Very well done!!

Your audio is very low and somewhat muffled. Make sure that the input for the microphone is pointed toward your mouth. Cardioid pattern microphones are designed to not pick up as much sound from the back side, and it’s easy to accidentally have the input turned the wrong way. Usually the logo is at the front side of the input, but check with your specific microphone to verify where the input is. If you’re not using a microphone for this class, that’s perfectly okay too! Recording on a phone or a laptop works too as we’re just focusing on the basics of voice acting for this class. 

Generally a good distance from your microphone as a rule of thumb is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other. For louder talking/yelling you may need to increase the distance a little and/or lower the gain. Having the microphone input pointed at your mouth but offset to one side maybe 20-30 degrees can help reduce plosives. Try to have waveform peaks for yelling/loud projection land between -9 dB and -3 dB. For normal talking, try to have the waveform peaks between -12 and -6 dB. Shoot for -3dB of headroom. 

Try to keep beginning silence to about 0.5 seconds or so.

0:12 Read “times” instead of “time”. Be aware of changing words and dropping or adding “s”. 

0:34 Mispronounced “carotenoid”. Don’t be afraid to look up how to pronounce words online if you aren’t familiar with them. Some great reference sources include Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/), youglish.com, forvo.com and You Tube Videos among other places (there’s a lot of options out there). You can simply type in “How to pronounce [word]” in Google search and it should give you several references. Try to avoid the robot / AI-sounding ones though.

0:45 Sounded like an extra “ed” in there like “used-ed”

0:54 Excellent use of pausing for change-ups and to highlight and underscore the point. 

1:11 Nice humanism in adding a laugh to the words

Don’t forget to tell us who your audience is in your description!

Overall, very well done! Keep up the great work!!