Forgot to say but the audience I imagined was just talking to a friend after a long day

Nice read! Nice smooth delivery. 

Good start in identifying your audience, but take it even further. What does your friend look like? Where are you? How far away from you are they when you’re talking? Are they paying attention to you while you’re talking or are they playing a game on their phone and distracted? How did you get on this topic - why are you telling your friend this? How are they reacting as you tell them the various things in the script? Think about the who, what, where, when, why and how. Conversations are very dynamic. Even if someone doesn’t speak, their facial expressions and body language impacts how we talk. Think about this as you perform your script. As voice actors we want to take the words off of the page and breathe life into them. Make it sound like you’re just talking or telling a story rather than reading a script. Add humanisms and moments that make it feel real. Change up your pacing, your emotion, volume, etc. These help to make it live and keep it interesting for people to listen to.

Staying well hydrated will help to reduce mouth clicks during recording. A good rule of thumb is to hydrate well a couple of hours before recording and drink water in between as you’re recording to stay hydrated. 

Nice change in character for the tongue twister. This helps show casting directors range when a second take is completely different from the first take.

VA 201 class goes into the emotional rollercoaster and I highly recommend it if you are able to take it. It really helped me turn a corner in my own voice acting.

Overall, very nicely done! Keep up the good work!