Jeez, that's a hell of a memory to channel, and it works. Sounds like a grandpa telling stories by the fireplace.

HW Review

Walker, I love that you pulled from personal experience for your performance. This is actually a form of Method Acting!

We encourage projection pretty heavily in 101 because many people struggle with it. It's also a great skill to be able to tone iT down and get intimate with the mic to create a softer performance like you have here. You definitely have the right experience to get personal with the script like this and it shows.

The pacing is slow, but it works very well with the scene you're aiming for, and at no point does it feel like it's "dragging on", because you continuously vary up the rhythm of each sentence in an engaging way. The emotion that you portray is beautifully done. I also love the little hesitancies and the use of vocalized breaths that add a lot to the life of this script.

Now you do have a few areas where your articulation wavers, such at 0:07 where you say "off-in" instead of "off-ten", at 0:20 "Mrs. Nilimore are but" where the "are but" blurs together with "Nilimore", at 0:55 where you almost completely lose the word "of", just to point out a few. There's also the matter of Mrs. Mary Nilimore herself. You refer to her as "Miss", when Mrs. should be spoken as "Misses".

Aside from the little droplets of missing articulation and the incorrect honorific for Mrs. Nilimore, this is a very solid read. Excellent work. This was a pleasure to listen to!