I can almost see the shister salesman in your performance. The pause at the end ton include the Thank You was a good touch.

Good pronunciation and great projection! We can definitely hear you and understand you without it sounding like you’re yelling! That’s the first thing that I can hear throughout this read. Your projection is great! Along with that, great breath control, you’re able to keep yourself going and not need to take a breath when it comes to some of the long winded sentences.

Your pacing is very fast for me, I’d like you to slow down and let the script breathe, play a little bit with pauses at points, especially towards the beginning as it felt extremely rushed. You do slow down as the script and read goes on, but is it because you’re consciously thinking about the tempo or are you losing stamina? 

Gotta be careful of those pronunciations as the speed leads into some word slurring and it might be causing the flubs in your reads. And when it comes to your flubs, try your best not to make a sound afterwards, you never need to apologize when it comes to flubbing, we all make mistakes and that’s okay! Just gotta stop, reassess, and then reset from the beginning of the last sentence. 

I see that you’re trying to go for some changeups but it comes off as a bit awkward, try to approach this with a more conversational feel to your read, more like how we converse to one another, regardless of whether it is a crowd or not. 

Good work to start with, keep that projection where it is, and I can’t wait to see what’s next for you!