I like how you used method acting, connecting the read to the memory of someone special in your own life. The chuckles are a fun touch, too. Nice work!

Fantastic read!

Your audio is much quieter than Week 1 and 2. The gain should be increased.

Generally a good distance between the microphone and your mouth as you are recording, as a rule of thumb, is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other. Try to have waveform peaks for yelling/loud projection land between -9 dB and -3 dB. For normal talking, try to have the waveform peaks between -12 and -6 dB. Shoot for -3dB of headroom. You may need to adjust your gain for louder and quieter parts; if so, it helps to know where to turn the gain to in order to achieve optimal levels during recording. 

0:05 Read “miss” instead of “missus”. There is a difference between “Ms., Miss, and Mrs.”. A small point, but important for differentiation. :) (Typical comment)

0:22 Nice laugh - good use of humanisms in the script.

0:30 Read “food” instead of “foods”. Be aware of changing words and dropping or adding “s”. 

0:34 Mispronounced “nasturtium”. Don’t be afraid to look up how to pronounce words online if you aren’t familiar with them. Some great reference sources include Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/), youglish.com, forvo.com and You Tube Videos among other places (there’s a lot of options out there). You can simply type in “How to pronounce [word]” in Google search and it should give you several references. Try to avoid the robot / AI-sounding ones though.

0:45 Be aware of any background movement or accidentally hitting the microphone while recording. If you notice any of this happening while recording, it’s good to re-record that line as it can be difficult to remove later. 

1:04 Nice sigh following a change of giggling and happy to a more somber moment. Nice use of humanisms in the read. This rollercoaster of emotions helps take the listener through the story and makes it feel like a journey and not just a read. Great work!

1:07 Missed the name “Mary”

1:19 I like your change-up for “nutmeg donuts” to be more of a “that was kinda weird but okay” vibe. I think you’re the first person I’ve heard do that and I love it. Nice job.

Nice work with the second read increasing the energy and dynamics.

Don’t forget to include the tongue twisters with your homework going forward. 

Lovely read for this script. Thank you for sharing the back story. Using moments of time or things or opinions we have about one thing and transferring and applying them to a script - even if it’s for something we don’t know or can’t relate to personally - is something that really helps us connect with the script and make it feel genuine and authentic. Which, you did an excellent job with for this read!! This is used quite a bit in authentic commercial work too in addition to character work, so keep up the excellent work and continue using this skill!