Lovely read! (I love your accent too. :D)

Don’t forget to tell us who your audience and demographics are in your homework. Really consider specifics of the context - who, what, where, when, why and how. Think about how your audience is dynamically responding to you as you speak to them. This will continue to help bring the script to life and lift the words off the page. 

0:05 Read “miss” instead of “missus”. There is a difference between “Ms., Miss, and Mrs.”. A small point, but important for differentiation. :) (Typical comment)

0:52 Missed word “to”

To take the read to the next level consider adding some additional momentary pauses. If you were actually speaking these words to someone, in between ideas you might pause and look at your audience to see how they are reacting to what you just said or let the thought sink in a little before continuing on. Remember your audience only generally gets to listen to you once, so you want them to have enough time to process and understand what you are saying.

I thought you did very well overall with articulation and enunciation. I only noted a word here or there that maybe the ending didn’t come through too well. Really nice script performance! Keep up the great work!