Nice work getting through the script! Im not really that concern with background noise, my main focus here is on your acting, so let’s look at a few ways to make your performance even stronger. First, your projection is good, but there’s still room to add more power. Right now, it sounds like you’re speaking to a small group, but imagine you’re in a large gym full of people you want your voice to reach the very back of the room. Take some deep breaths and really engage your diaphragm to push your voice outward. This will give your performance more weight and presence, helping the audience feel the excitement and importance of what you’re delivering.

Next, your breath support needs a bit of attention. Toward the end, it sounded like you were running out of air, which can make lines feel cut off or rushed. Keep practicing exercises like doggy pants, which are excellent for building stamina, breath control, and maintaining a consistent tone throughout your performance. Some words could flow a little more naturally, so focus on pacing and rhythm letting your read breathe a bit will make it sound effortless and professional.

Finally, don’t forget to have fun with it! You’re selling something exciting, so think of a real-life experience or passion that genuinely energizes you, and channel that energy into your read. Let that authentic excitement shine through in your tone, facial expressions, and inflection it will make your performance feel more engaging, relatable, and memorable. Overall, solid work—just a little more projection, breath support, pacing, and genuine energy, and this read will truly stand out!