slow down man! the words aren't gonna run away. I love your voice and energy but you're reading it at such a break neck pace that you HAVE to have a script to understand half of it. just take your time, and you'll be fine!

Hmm, as you said, you could afford to slow down, but I gotta give you props for keeping up the articulation of each word for the majority of the script!

Wow you really blitzed through this! This is really impressive if this was a cold read, you went blazing fast here. too fast even! Your articulation was ok but suffered from the speed. Take a breath, slow down. Like waaaaay down. We wanted to hear projection here not speed. We're not an actual commercial with a time constraint! I think there was some confusion over the one take requirement. We didn't want a flawless take, we wanted a continuous take. Meaning, start to finish, no editing, all mistakes included. That helps us hear how you handle mistakes. The main point being stoping the read, going back up the script to a natural break, and taking the whole line again.

As for the projection, love it! Solid 7 the whole time, well supported, and well projected! Only note is related to your pacing again. Your breaths were running into your lines. When you do this, your breath can't be cut out without cutting off some of the script. When you take breaths, stop reading, pause, breathe, pause, continue read. This gives you both a spot to cut out the breathing and a chance to look forward and read the script.

Pay close attention to your ends of words. Often times in the read you were using the wrong endings, not saying a plural, adding a plural, slight stumble on a word. These things should be a stop and re-take the line.

Great work here Shiny, you did well going fast but remember you don't have to! Pause, take a breath or two or three, and continue on!