I probably wouldn't have noticed your nasality if you hadn't mentioned it! So thanks for the lesson in fine tuning my ears hehe! Your articulation was great; very easy to understand all of the words. I also liked the variation you added that was "salesy" so that it wasn't monotone. It seems like the series of adjectives was a bit harder for you, slowing you down a bit and you lost a bit of your confident tone there compared to the rest of the script. Bravo!!

Very nicely done! I could tell you were working on projection! Great job!

0:36 Read “entrée” as “entry”. 

1:13 For repeated words, look for ways to say the words differently - “change-up” to keep it interesting - varying pace, pitch, etc. in the way you read the words.

Generally a good distance between the microphone and your mouth as you are recording, as a rule of thumb, is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other. Try to have waveform peaks for yelling/loud projection land between -9 dB and -3 dB. For normal talking, try to have the waveform peaks between -12 and -6 dB. Shoot for -3dB of headroom. You may need to adjust your gain for louder and quieter parts; if so, it helps to know where to turn the gain to in order to achieve optimal levels during recording. Having the microphone input pointed at your mouth but offset to one side maybe 20-30 degrees can help reduce plosives.

As a side point, you don’t need to tell people when you record sick or when you have allergies. I couldn’t really tell and wouldn’t have known if you didn’t tell me. :) 

Audacity is fine to use. It’s all up to personal preference on what DAW, or editor, you’d like to use. The DAW or editor you are using is also something you generally don’t need to tell people.

The end with the lists felt a little bit choppy, but other than that - well done overall! Keep up the good work!