I honestly liked your take a lot. Keeping up the energy throughout longer reads like this is pretty difficult, but you knocked it out of the park! My personal pointers as an amateur:

Be wary of how you end each line: are you trailing off? or ramping up? you can use either to set the tone or lead into the next line.

Don't be scared to read a bit faster! Especially for lists (and there were a ton in this read), I find it reads more naturally to pick up the tempo a bit.

Keeping these two points in mind can help to make a script feel more natural and engaging. I'd be willing to bet that with some more cold reads & auditions, you could put together some killer lines!

I like your projection! I believed you were speaking to a big room full of people. I felt like I was in the back of the room trying to get a good look at our speaker. I think it might be worth trying lowering your gain and coming closer to the mic, your voice will be even more pronounced.

Projection was great!

AWESOME energy and projection in this!! Seems like the other comments covered any tips so that’s all I got!

You definitely hit the projection note! I like your read on "don't forget to pick up your free gift".

Fantastic read! Great use of projection. Nice work going slow enough to accurately read the script too!

0:41 Read “entrée” as “entry” 

For the next homework, we’ll be working on articulation and enunciation. There were some words here and there that could benefit from being spoken more clearly with these skills we’ll work on next.

Generally a good distance between the microphone and your mouth as you are recording, as a rule of thumb, is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other. Try to have waveform peaks for yelling/loud projection land between -9 dB and -3 dB. For normal talking, try to have the waveform peaks between -12 and -6 dB. Shoot for -3dB of headroom. You may need to adjust your gain for louder and quieter parts; if so, it helps to know where to turn the gain to in order to achieve optimal levels during recording. 

And, Audacity is fine to use. It’s all up to personal preference on what DAW, or editor, you’d like to use. When you’re ready to take the next step to improve your voiceover recording, you will want to look into treating your recording space with acoustic foam (we recommend 4” thick) and/or blankets to help reduce the reflections and reverb in the space. Basically covering any hard, reflective surfaces that sound bounces off of with soft materials like blankets or towels, etc. It’s not necessary for this class however as we are just focusing on the basics of voice acting, but something to think about as you progress in your journey.

Excellent work!