Good read! Nice use of variation in the read and your enthusiasm came through nicely. This helps to engage your listener. 

Try to cut down the extra silence/room tone at the beginning of your read to about 0.5 seconds. Casting directors may have hundreds of auditions to sift through, and they will generally know within the first few seconds whether they want to continue listening or move on to the next one. Having 3-4 seconds of dead air at the beginning may increase the likelihood that the casting director might skip your audition and move on to the next one. 

0:35 Read “trode” instead of “trotted”

0:45 Mispronounced “stupendous”. Don’t be afraid to look up how to pronounce words online if you aren’t familiar with them. Some great reference sources include Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/), youglish.com, forvo.com and You Tube Videos among other places (there’s a lot of options out there). You can simply type in “How to pronounce [word]” in Google search and it should give you several references. (Try to avoid the ones that sound like a robot read them.)

0:47 Mispronounced “propitiated”

0:53 When you misread or have a little stumble (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record as a pick-up, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later. When the mistakes are then edited out, it will sound like you read everything perfectly.

1:14 Added word “in”

1:18 Missed word “of”

I’d recommend trimming the silence on the end too down to about 0.5 seconds or so as well.

Don’t forget to include the tongue twisters in the homework going forward.

For actual gigs and auditions, be sure to quality check your work after recording to ensure you correctly performed the script. It is very important to many casting directors to have voice actors accurately read the written copy (script). 

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, articulation and enunciation, (particularly for P, T, and D sounds for this exercise script), I could tell you were working on all of these qualities and thought you did well with it. 

Regarding projection specifically, I feel like you have room to go even further. Keep working the SOVT exercises and practice using your diaphragm to really push the sound out and project like you were in a gymnasium full of people with no microphone - you would need to be able to be heard at the back corner.

I encourage you to continue working on enunciation and articulation and continue strengthening this skill. Really hit the letters of P, T, and D in this exercise no matter where they fall within the word. For example, the word “little” be sure to hit those “t’s” harder when you are practicing articulation exercises. Try over-enunciating and over-articulating like Burger showed in class with the cork trick. Being able to adjust the level of articulation in your read from very precise to normal everyday talking is an excellent tool to have in your voice acting toolbox. Keep practicing this skill as it will be an invaluable asset in voice acting as you continue along your journey.

Make sure you don’t lose the ends of words when practicing articulation and enunciation. In natural speaking, the ends tend to fall off or not be hit hard, but exercising and strengthening the quality to fully pronounce words is an excellent tool to have in your tool box. Really focus on hitting all of the letters in the words and clearly pronouncing all of them. When practicing articulation and enunciation it’s good to over-do it.

Keep up the great work!