Nice read! I could tell you were working on articulation and enunciation and overall felt you did well with it. Good projection too.

Be aware of any movement sounds you are making as you record as that is being picked up by the microphone and can be hard to edit out after recording in actual gigs.

0:04 When you misread or have a little stumble (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record as a pick-up, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later. When the mistakes are then edited out, it will sound like you read everything perfectly. (Good job later on applying this on several areas in the script! Just be aware of those littler almost-stumbles too that may come out a tad weird.)

0:13 Read “GG Company” instead of “GGG Company” In commercial scripts when you get to the brand name, give it some extra love. This is the client who’s paying you! They want their name to be remembered positively in commercials. :)

0:15 Read “stand” instead of “stands” - be aware of changing words and dropping or adding “s”

0:59 Good effort on enunciating and articulating, but Graham is still pronounced like “Gram” and not “Gray-ham”. :)

1:07 Added word “the”

1:09 Added some extra “est” :) (Though I’d leave it if I were auditioning in one take because it adds to the fun! But I’d probably do another take with exactly what was written.)

1:11 Read “spirit” instead of “spirits”

1:14 Read “Glided” instead of “Gilded”

2:04 Nice ending on your homework script! Solid!

It’s alright to practice the read a couple of times before recording if that helps you to become more comfortable with it. Slowing down will also make it easier to read and have less stumbles. One person I know likes to make the script font bigger so it forces them to slow down and they find they have more accurate reading that way.

For actual gigs and auditions, be sure to quality check your work after recording to ensure you correctly performed the script. It is very important to many casting directors to have voice actors accurately read the written copy (script). 

Great energy and use of variation in the read. It was fun to listen to and once the mistakes are edited out on an actual gig or audition, you’ve got solid work there! Good job!