First things first, it’s GREAT that you did not edit out those breaths. We do not want you to over-edit (cut, clip, splice, remove, ect.) your audio that you submit for homework. In order to be able to provide you with thorough feedback, we need to be able to “see your work”. Now I can recognize those breaths and understand how they contribute to your performance :)

First Impressions: Your projection is spot on! You keep it consistent, recognize where you need to pause and breath, and follow-through each sentence with that breath you take. You don’t let the big breaths cut into your sentences, so they can be edited out more easily. You have a cheerful tone that suits the genre of the story being told.

0:01 Pronounces “a”(ay) as “uh”, I’ll admit that I didn’t point this out for everyone, but I promise that you are not the only one that falls into that natural pronunciation of “a” as “uh” instead. There’s nothing inherently wrong about this pronunciation, but when asked to over-articulate, it’s important to be aware of these common speech habits.

0:48 “Trotted” sounds like “Trodded”

0:49 Says “over ta his” instead of “over to his”

1:59, 2:21 Says “Podder”, “Peder Peddigrew”, and “maddered” instead of “Potter”, “Peter Pettigrew”, and “mattered” Be careful not to pronounce T’s as D’s when articulating. Again, not inherently wrong, but important to be mindful of when you need to fully articulate your words for a project. 

Final Thoughts: This is a very solid read. Your articulation is pretty good with only a few miner scuffs to note. Your projection is great! Something to keep in mind though, be careful not to sacrifice the performance for the sake of projecting. You take deep breaths that allow you to pace yourself through each sentence, but you may be focusing too much on the aspect of projecting that you are losing the natural warmth of your voice and it becomes a little repetitive and robotic in some areas as a result.

This reliance on deep breaths for consistent projection and pacing will ease as you continue to keep working on your breath control and incorporate the daily breathing exercises, so no doubt you will improve with that and be able to play more with the personality of the performance later. Lovely read altogether!