I heard a bit of an accent! But it's definitely on the milder side - I think I mainly notice it on the H's, W's, N's and O's. It's a really lovely accent, so hopefully you find lots of work that puts it to great use.

To answer your question, your accent is still flowing through your speech, and that’s okay! Clear articulation in speech does not require a “general American” accent, but some accents can make certain enunciations and articulations more difficult to achieve. 

So let’s talk about that a little bit first. Your accent leads you to hitting your R’s very strongly, your T’s might sound like D’s, your W’s might have a slight “V” sound, and so on. The more you start listening to yourself, the more you’ll be able to pick up on these “quirks” and you will be able to address them to improve your articulation and enunciation. By no means do you need to eliminate these aspects of your voice (in fact, your natural accent can be one of your strongest assets as a voice actor!), but it is good to learn to be aware of them.

Now, onto the full review:

First Impressions: Good energy! I like the enthusiasm in your tone! It’s fun and exciting and it pulls the listener into the performance, but be careful with that energy. You are pushing yourself to express quickly, and by doing so you are running out of breath and sacrificing articulation in the process. 

0:03 “Berret Burrow’s” sounds like “Berd Burrs”. This is a good example of the hard R’s that are present in your accent. When you speak too quickly, your R’s tend to blur into each other. Slow down and focus on each individual word. Allow those spaces in between words to be present in your speech. Give careful attention to each word spoken.

0:10 “delicacy for yourself!” at this point you have pushed as much of your breath out as you can. You are at your limit, and it can be heard. You have to take a quick gasp for air, but it’s not enough, and you lose impact on “GGG company!” because you’ve used up all of your air already. This is why we emphasize the breathing practices on day 1. It’s especially important to be aware of your breathing when you are using high-energy when script reading, as you will use more air to be more expressive.

0:32 Love the croaking zombie! Very fun choice! Be mindful of your vocalized breaths though. You take a breath before and after the zombie portion. With a read like this, you can take an extra couple of seconds to turn your face away from the mic when you breath, or take a slower and quieter breath, so that it does not come through in the recording.

0:54 Says “spirit” instead of “spirits”

1:00 Says “super by augmented” instead of “superbly (superb-blee) augmented”

1:06-1:20 You brought the energy down, but you also allowed yourself to follow a slower pace which gave you better room to articulate. This section was very well done!

Tongue Twister: Very nice! Clear, concise, and well paced. 

Final Thoughts: You have a naturally friendly tone and I love that you put so much energy and enthusiasm into your read. You hit most of your T’s and P’s very clearly!

That said, I would highly recommend practicing this read again on your own time and experiment with your pacing and breathing. Slow down, focus on one word at a time, and allow yourself to breathe naturally so that you aren’t finding yourself gasping for breath or running out of air in the middle of a sentence. Once you can manage your breath control and articulate in a calmer tone, then you can start speeding things up bit by bit.

Extra Note: Using physicality is fantastic, but as voice actors, we have to be very, VERY careful not to disturb the mic or the environment around you. There are a few spots throughout your read where you bump your mic, your desk, or another part of your recording environment. Be mindful of the position of your mic and your own body as you perform to avoid this. (and no worries, everyone bumps their mic or something else now and then, just good to start practicing to avoid that sooner rather than later to save yourself some editing grief!)