Great use of variations in pacing, volume, style, energy in your read! 

When submitting auditions, make sure you edit down the silence at the beginning to about 0.5 seconds or so. 

0:11 Read “saving” instead of “savings” - be aware of changing words and dropping or adding “s”

0:17 Added word “with”

0:21 Read “guaranteed” instead of “guarantee” and added word “and”

0:27 Read “alternation” instead of “alterations” and added word “and”

0:41 Added word “and”

0:45 Read “entrée” as “entry” 

0:46 Read “fees” instead of “charges” and added word “and”

0:48, 2:00, 2:31 Read “purchase” instead of “purchases”

0:58 When you misread or have a little stumble (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record as a pick-up, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later. When the mistakes are then edited out, it will sound like you read everything perfectly. (Typical Comment)

1:16 Added word “are”

1:15 Missed word “in”

1:53 Mispronounced “gourmet”. Don’t be afraid to look up how to pronounce words online if you aren’t familiar with them. Some great reference sources include Cambridge Dictionary (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/dictionary/), youglish.com, and forvo.com and You Tube Videos among other places (there’s a lot of options out there). You can simply type in “How to pronounce [word]” in Google search and it should give you several references. 

2:05 Read “we will” instead of “we’ll”

2:09 Missed word “a”

I noticed that you adapted the script and added words to help it feel more smooth in your read. This is something that may be good in some instances, but in others, you will want to follow the script exactly. Especially in commercial work and medical narration/legal disclaimers - they may have run the script through a legal department to say EXACTLY what they want said and nothing else to be added. Following the script to the letter is a very important skill in voice acting. In an audition, if you go off script to improve it in one take, be sure to have a second take with exactly what’s written. Some writers will also take offense if the script is changed by a voice actor, so that is a potential risk as well. Adding humanisms to a script (like sighs, laughs, hmms, etc.) that aren’t necessarily words are often what is recommended to enhance a script versus changing the wording. Be sure to quality check your work after recording to ensure you correctly performed the script. It is very important to many casting directors to have voice actors accurately read the written copy (script).

I felt like your energy kind of decreased as you got towards the end of the script. Continue working on the SOVT exercises to increase your stamina. It’s important to be able to carry the same energy throughout a script. Character scripts may have more variations in energy than commercial or narration scripts. 

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, I feel like there is some room for improvement. I felt that parts of it were well projected - but other moments lacked energy and were more intimate and quiet. Imagine the scenario of being in a gym or large auditorium with no microphone and you need your voice to be heard in every single corner of the room. Engage with your diaphragm and take in a big, deep breath to fill up your lungs so that you have the power to push your voice out even further throughout the whole script. 

Overall, nice work and we look forward to hearing what you bring to the next homework assignment!