Your tempo and pacing are moving a bit too quickly right now, which can make it harder for the audience to follow along. Slowing down will not only make your delivery clearer but will also help with your breath control, so you don’t run out of air towards the end of your read. When you take your time, you allow space for the words to breathe and for the listener to absorb what you're saying. It also gives you more control over your delivery and allows the emotions to land more effectively.

A consistent smile can really transform your tone, making your performance warmer and more welcoming. Right now, it feels like you're just reading through the lines without much engagement or connection to the material. Think about something that genuinely excites you or something that really matters to you in your performance. This will help bring a more authentic and engaging energy to your voice. If you allow yourself to connect emotionally with what you're saying, your delivery will sound more genuine, and your audience will connect with you better.

Your projection could also use a bit more focus. There are moments where your voice drops off, and it’s important to keep your energy and projection consistent throughout the read. Remember, you're in a gym full of people without a microphone, so your voice needs to carry and be heard clearly by everyone. The audience needs to feel like you’re speaking directly to them, and that means using your diaphragm to project your voice across the space. Overall, this was a solid job, but with a little more attention to pacing, projection, and maintaining that emotional engagement, your performance will become even stronger. Keep practicing, and I look forward to hearing your progress next week!