Recording volume was a bit low, delivery seemed good though.

Nice read!

0:39, 0:54, etc. When you misread or have a little stumble (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record as a pick-up, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later. When the mistakes are then edited out, it will sound like you read everything perfectly. (Typical Comment)

Another important element is maintaining your energy throughout the entire performance. You regained energy at the beginning of several sentences but by the end it seems to dip. Try to carry that energy right through to the last word. Consistency is key, especially when conveying excitement about something, and keeping the energy level high from start to finish will keep the audience engaged. 

Your volume is a little low. For yelling/loud speaking, aim to have your waveform peaks between -9 and -3 dB, and for normal talking between -12 and -6 dB. 

You did a really good job overall with the read. I saw that you noticed and corrected stumbles and mistakes as you went through. Identifying them while reading is half the battle. Just be sure to go back to the beginning of the line to make final editing easier for a clean finished product. 

I felt you did really well with your articulation and enunciation and you made a good effort with the projection. Keep up the good work!