Excellent backstory/scene you have envisioned. 

Well done with the read! The only things I’d mention is you replaced the word “stretched” with “reached, and the pacing felt a little stilted/staccato where you stopped frequently and only said a few words at once. I’d suggest playing with it to keep it smooth instead of choppy, but if you’re going to pause for emphasis keep it to the main ideas you want to sink in.

Loved the emotion and power you brought to the words. The increase in energy as you delivered your speech. The changes in pacing, power. Nicely done!