audience is a studio audience watching a show about sports highlights

Nice read!

You took a very “matter of fact” approach to this script. In a second take, I’d love to hear you have a little more fun with it - put energy and overacting in it. As the directions said - “share your surprise and excitement with us!”. Often what we think is way over the top, really isn’t when it’s recorded, so don’t be afraid to play around with it! When we have fun, the audience will likely also enjoy listening to it. If we’re bored, the audience will also likely be bored. Something to keep in mind. It’s okay to show emotion and really lean into the script - bring it to life and lift the words off the page.

0:28, 0:34 Did you do some preliminary research to look up how “Vacanti” and “Silvianis” may be correctly pronounced? Youglish.com, You Tube, Google Translate, etc. can be excellent resources for pronunciations. You can also google, “How to pronounce [insert name/word]” and will often find many references. When there isn’t an exact match, you can look for similar names/occurrences and take your best educated guess. If you have the luxury of time and a contact person for the project, it doesn’t hurt to reach out and ask for a pronunciation guide for any you are unsure about. This may be less crucial in auditions, but certainly important for actual gigs. Doing your due diligence and taking the initiative may also impress upon the casting director that you care about their project and bringing it to life in the manner they’d like to see it completed in.

0:44 It feels like a little stumble occurred here - When you misread, stumble a little, or hit an odd pace or breath (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later. At the end of the recording, you want to have recorded enough takes that when it’s all edited together and cleaned up it will sound like you never made a mistake once. 

0:52 missed word “in”

0:59 I hear “Silvianis sad state” instead of “Silvianis’s sad state”. Slow it down a little to make it easier to pronounce all those extra “s” sounds. It’s definitely a challenge when the word ends with “s” and the next one starts with “s”.

1:30 read “that” instead of “the”

1:52 read “the” instead of “this”

Don’t be afraid to practice reading the script a few or several times to become more familiar and comfortable with the script. And then, quality check it after recording. Compare what you recorded with what was written and look at the details - were any words changed, added or missed? The more you practice improving the quality of your reads and your skill in cold reading, the easier voice acting becomes and the less editing and/or pick-ups that will need to occur on the back end.

Now that you’ve identified an audience, take it even further. Instead of a faceless audience, think of one specific person in particular you are speaking to and imagine they are in the room with you. Think about the who, what, where, why, when, how of the scene to bring it to life even further. 

To take it to the next level, think about how fast things happen in sports in real time. Imagine the scene playing out in your mind - you are seeing all these actions and then you are reacting to them naturally while quickly explaining it to your audience. How would a live event announcer have spoken these words? Think about how you can make your performance feel even more authentic and genuine. 

Keep up the good work!

I agree with Melody. You have a good voice for this type of script, but you can go bigger/bolder/more animated with it definitely.