Good read! Where you really let loose and had fun with the script, it really came through nicely and was a fun listen! :) However, you did sound a little bored with most of the rest of it. If you are bored, your listening audience will likely be bored too. Think about how a live event announcer would announce this script and the pace they would deliver at as they watch the event unfold and are explaining it for people watching/listening. 

Now that you’ve identified an audience, take it even further. Instead of a faceless audience, think of one specific person in particular you are speaking to and imagine they are in the room with you. Think about the who, what, where, why, when, how of the scene to bring it to life. Add emotions and feeling to the read to really level it up.

Your audio is panned all the way to the left. Be sure that the panning is centered and that you are recording and exporting your voice recordings in mono (not stereo).

0:02 The tongue twister got you :) Read “Friday’s Friday” instead of “Freddie’s Friday”

0:08 read “week show” instead of “week’s show”. Slow it down a tad to be sure and pronounce all the “s” sounds - it can be challenging when one word ends in “s” and the next one starts with “s”.

0:13 mispronounced “scrumptiously”

0:25 “Formidable” was a little mumbled - be sure to clearly and fully speak all of the words

0:27 I hear “Venezuela” instead of “Venezuelan”

0:28 read “attackers” instead of “attacker”

0:30  When you misread, stumble a little, or hit an odd pace or breath (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later.

Don’t be afraid to practice reading the script a few or several times to become more familiar and comfortable with the script. And then, quality check it after recording. Compare what you recorded with what was written and look at the details - were any words changed, added or missed? The more you practice improving the quality of your reads and your skill in cold reading, the easier voice acting becomes and the less editing and/or pick-ups that will need to occur on the back end.

It’s okay to make mistakes. But, how you handle them is the important thing with voice acting. At the end of the recording, you want to have recorded enough takes that when it’s all edited together and cleaned up it will sound like you never made a mistake once. Listen as you are recording for any flubs. If you catch them as you are reading, you can stop right then and go back and re-record that line again using the same tone, pace, inflections, etc but without the mistake. Keep doing this every time you notice an error. For real auditions or gigs, you will want to listen back through again and when you find something you missed during recording (happens to us all!) go back preferably the same day and record that pick-up and insert it replacing the mistake. This is a skill and takes time, but the end results are worth it. For our homework here, we want to see how you handle the mistake and go back and give it another go. Don’t just leave the mistakes as-is if you notice them. The more you practice reading out loud and performing out loud, etc. the easier it becomes and the better you will become at cold reading. No one is perfect and that’s okay. But, with practice, we can certainly improve our skills. :) 

As voice actors, we need to have the ability to clearly speak all of the written words so that they are understood. I also encourage you to continue practicing your articulation and enunciation to further sharpen your skills. When practicing these qualities, it’s okay to go overboard and really hit all of the letters. Make sure you don’t lose the ends of words too when practicing these qualities as well. In natural speaking, the ends tend to fall off or not be hit hard, but exercising and strengthening the quality to fully pronounce words is an excellent tool to have in your voice acting tool box. You can try over-enunciating and over-articulating like Burger showed in Class 2 with the cork trick. Keep practicing and it will get easier. :)

Keep up the good work!