Really nice!

Your audio seems to be a little on the quiet side. You may want to raise the gain a little more so that your normal talking peaks are between -18 dB and -6dB and your yelling/loud talking falls between -9 dB and -3 dB.

It sounds like you may also be a tad far from the microphone. Try moving just a little closer and you’ll find a bit of a fuller sound for your audio recordings. Generally a good distance as a rule of thumb is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other.

The areas where you let loose and had fun really came through brilliantly! It brought the script to life! Loved the laugh and humanisms you added. There were, however, parts where you slipped into more of a read than a live-action sequence so be aware of this to make sure you carry the fun and authenticity throughout the whole read. For example 0:59 you sounded very matter of fact as you ended the paragraph “match 3 of venezuela volleyball opens”. How would a live event announcer sound if they said this line? What kind of energy would they have? Think about the who, what, where, why, when, how of the scene to bring it to life even further.

Now, the only thing missing is the answer to Burger’s question: Who is your audience you were speaking to?

Great work overall! Nicely done!

Once you warmed up and got into it, this really started to work (basically from "Vacanti's already in position!" to "on match 3 of Venezuela volleyball opens" and then from Fauscher getting hit in the face to the end). Just cut loose and don't let yourself fade between the exciting parts.