Great pacing. Well read! I like the kind smile you put into your read, which is appropriate.

You are very close on sounding authentic, but there is still some room for improvement. It’s a challenging skill to acquire to turn a script from just a read and to take it to the next level and make it your own so that it feels like the words are genuinely coming from your heart and your authentic self and feelings. This skill is covered in more detail in advanced courses like VA 201, 301 and other special courses like “Authentic Narration Voiceover” that Dave Bisson teaches here at Closing Credits. 

2:02 A bit of a stumble/odd pause - would be worth another take when this happens

I notice a pattern where a lot of your sentences end on an uptick. This can make it sound like you are a little unsure at times. If it’s a solid thought and/or a closing thought or sure thing - try ending with a downward “final” inflection on sentences like that to close it off to reflect more confidence.

Staying well hydrated will help to reduce mouth clicks during recording. A good rule of thumb is to hydrate well a couple of hours before recording and drink water in between as you’re recording to stay hydrated.

As you progress with voice acting, investing in the RX series mouth declick plug-in is a very useful and worthwhile tool to have at your disposal to help keep the recording as clean as possible. 

When you’re ready to take the next step to improve your voiceover recording, you may want to look into adding some additional treatment to your recording space with acoustic foam and/or blankets to help reduce the reflections and reverb in the space even further. A good goal is to get roomtone down to -60dB or less as this is the industry standard. Moving the microphone away from a computer/fan significantly improves room tone as well. It’s not necessary for this class however as we are focusing on the basics of voice acting.

Overall great work!

Now, the only thing missing is the answer to Burger’s question: Who is your audience you were speaking to?

The potential is there. A little bit of a brush-up on pacing, enunciation, projection, and background noise is needed, but you have the core skills to be a narrator.