You have a really great commercial voice!!

Overall, really nice work! 

0:09, 0:25 I can hear a little distortion in your read where you may have clipped a little. You’ll want to turn down your gain a tad or adjust your audio processing to make sure it doesn’t distort the audio. For normal talking try to have your peaks land between -18 dB and -6dB and your yelling/loud talking falls between -9 dB and -3 dB.

0:31 “Entrée” was read as “entry”. Be careful about changing the words in the script. :)

0:42 missed the word “so”

0:45 I hear “why” instead of “while” - be sure to fully, clearly pronounce the words

1:29, 1:53 read “purchase” instead of “purchases” - minor word change 

1:36 kind of tripped up on “complimentary”. When you misread (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later.

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, I felt that you did well with it, however, there may be room to do more with projection. Think about the scene of being in a gym or large auditorium with no microphone and you need your voice to be heard in every single corner of the room. Engage with your diaphragm and take in a big, deep breath to fill up your lungs so that you have the power to push your voice out.

On the flip side, I also encourage you to continue practicing your SOVT exercises and working on your vocal stamina. There were a lot of "gasping" type breaths in your read that tend to stand out after a while. The better your lung capacity and stamina the easier it is to control the breaths and keep them to a minimum. You can also go in after the recording and lower the volume on the breaths during the editing process if desired. Or, if you leave them in as-is for actual gigs, be sure to leave enough room between words and breaths so that the audio engineer can go in and reduce or remove them as needed. If gasps are too close and/or part of the next word it becomes more challenging to edit and may require a pick-up later on. Just something to bear in mind. Breathing is perfectly normal and okay! We just want to make sure they aren't overly repeated/obvious such that they stand out and detract from what is being spoken.

Overall your sound quality is good - particularly once you tame the distortions. You did a good job with including some variations in your read and your enunciation and articulation was good. To take your read to the next level, think about the emotion or feeling you put into your read. Particularly with commercials, you are the voice of the brand. You represent this company. Your read generally felt dis-interested or bored, matter-of-fact. Now, there is a place for this type of read in commercials, don’t get me wrong. However, in general, if this were a commercial audition, they would probably look for a different talent for this reason even though your quality was good. Deb Munro relates a story that essentially runs along the lines of: your client may have mortgaged their home in order to make this product and pay a voice actor to create an advertisement to help them sell it. (This literally was something she came across in her career.) So, every commercial you voice, be sure to put your heart and soul into it like this is the best thing ever and you believe in it and others should too (even if you could care less about the product/brand). The VA 201 course will go more into the emotional rollercoaster of voice acting and I highly recommend it - it really helped me take my voice acting to the next level.

Overall, very well done! Keep up the great work!