Nice read!

0:00 Try to keep your silence at the beginning to around 0.5 seconds max.

0:02 The words that have “s” at the end and “s” at the beginning of the next one can be challenging. A good way to ensure you pronounce the entire word is to slow down a little so you can comfortably leave enough space to say both words naturally.

0:12  I hear “guarantee” rather than “guaranteed”, be aware of enunciation and when appropriate make sure you pronounce the word completely.

0:26 “Entrée” was read as “entry”. Be careful about changing the words in the script. :)

0:27 “hidden” wasn’t quite fully pronounced - somewhat mumbled. Be sure to enunciate and articulate your words. As voice actors it is very important that all of our words be clearly understood. (Similar comment on 0:36 “order)

0:30  missed the word “on” in “no one will call on you”

0:41 read “mileages” instead of “mileage”. Be aware of changing words and dropping or adding “s”.

0:45 “some items not available” was kind of slurred and run together

0:50  To take things to the next level, ensure that any repeated words or similar patterns stay different by using change-ups and variation to keep things interesting.

1:13, 1:34  “purchase” instead of “purchases” - minor word change 

1:27  odd break/pacing/breath in “combination…key ring magnifying glass and garden hose” - may be worth another take if you hit an odd pacing/stride in your read

1:28 read “with” instead of “in”. When reading auditions in general, do pay attention to not changing words in the copy for at least one of your takes. It’s okay to make some changes or play around with the script and include improv, but it’s also important to be able to read copy as written - after all, the writer may have chosen the wording in the script for a particular reason and could possibly be offended at having it changed by someone just hired to voice it - so just bear that in mind.

The main feedback to work on would be your articulation and enunciation. It’s very important for voice actors to be able to speak clearly and fully pronounce words - even when speaking quickly so that our words can be completely understood.  It’s okay to slow down a little when needed.

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, I felt that you did well with it, however, there may be room to do more with projection. Think about the scene of being in a gym or large auditorium with no microphone and you need your voice to be heard in every single corner of the room. Engage with your diaphragm and take in a big, deep breath to fill up your lungs so that you have the power to push your voice out.

Overall, well read. Keep up the good work!