That last one is so hard, but I think you killed the hard parts really well, especially when talking about the pencil sharpener and combination item at the end. I think the pacing at the beginning was a bit fast, but then when you started breathing, the read began to become more natural, imo. I think yours was a solid take all around! Can't wait to see what you can do in the future.

Excellent work! 

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, I felt that you did an excellent job working with this quality. 

Lists like these can make it easy to develop rhythm so the next level is to ensure that any repeated words or similar patterns stay different using change-ups to keep things interesting. I felt you did a good job using variations used throughout the script and different pacing where appropriate. Enunciation and articulation were overall very good.

0:06 read “performances” instead of “performance” be aware of changing words and dropping or adding “s”

0:30, 1:30, 1:56 “purchase” instead of “purchases” - minor word change

0:32 missed the word “on” in “no one will call on you”

0:59 missed the word “on” in “come on in” in these three repeats

1:04 missed the word “a” in “and a free consultation”

1:36 added the word “also”

1:46 read “magnification” instead of “magnifying”. When reading auditions in general, do pay attention to not changing words in the copy for at least one of your takes. It’s okay to make some changes or play around with the script and include improv, but it’s also important to be able to read copy as written - after all, the writer may have chosen the wording in the script for a particular reason and could possibly be offended at having it changed by someone just hired to voice it - so just bear that in mind.

1:50 missed the word “a” in “in a genuine…”

1:52 When you misread (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later.

Overall solid read. Nice work!