I really enjoy your voice/voice acting work, your volume is indeed on the lower end as you stated and thus doesn't really sound like you're in a gymnasium without a mic trying to get your voice to the crowd. Although, I do like your energy and reading/pacing regardless, also mess ups happen and I had several as well during my takes as well, but good catches and fixes! I say great work overall!

Not gonna lie, I do love how this was, It did sound more like it was a buisness comercial more than a gym, but it's def evective and honesly amazing how ya did it! Love the atitude and tone! ^^

Nicely read!

0:01 The words that have “s” at the end and “s” at the beginning of the next one can be challenging. A good way to ensure you pronounce the entire word is to slow down a little so you can comfortably leave enough space to say both words naturally.

0:31, 1:23, 1:51 “purchase” instead of “purchases” - minor word change

0:33 missed the word “on” in “no one will call on you”

0:51 “are” added in “some items not available”

0:54, 1:00, 1:45 When you misread (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later.

0:58 To take things to the next level, ensure that any repeated words or similar patterns stay different using change-ups to keep things interesting.

1:15 I hear “deluxt” rather than “deluxe”

1:33 read “collect” instead of “classic”

1:40 It sounds like you went a little off mic for a moment. Be aware of where the microphone input is to ensure your clarity and levels remain consistent during recording.

You also sound a little far from the microphone. Generally a good distance as a rule of thumb is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other. If you are using a USB or XLR microphone, be sure you are speaking directly into the input diaphragm of the microphone - usually the logo will face the front, but check with your exact model if so. Cardioid patterns will often deaden sound behind the input diaphragm and it’s easy to accidentally speak into the backside and thus have lower volume and clarity.

When you’re ready to take the next step to improve your voiceover recording, you will want to look into treating your recording space with acoustic foam and/or blankets to help reduce the reflections and reverb in the space. It’s not necessary for this class however as we are focusing on the basics of voice acting.

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, I felt that there is some room for improvement as I suspect you could make your read even a little louder and more projected. Keep practicing this and working with the SOVT exercises to improve stamina. 

You had a nice conversational type read, which is very in-style for commercial reads right now. Overall, nice job and keep up the good work!