Great read!

0:02-0:05 The words that have “s” at the end and “s” at the beginning of the next one can be challenging. A good way to ensure you pronounce the entire word is to slow down a little so you can comfortably leave enough space to say both words naturally. As it was read, the first three items in the list kind of ran together, so be sure to slow down enough to give everything its thought/place and be clearly pronounced.

1:20 When you trip up or misread (happens to everyone and it’s okay!), it’s highly encouraged to start again at the beginning of the sentence or paragraph or a point that would make it easy to remove and replace the mistake during editing. If you just keep going and don’t return to a solid point that makes it easy to edit out the mistake, you may need to come back later and re-record, and it becomes challenging to make it sound the same as the original recording. So, a good rule of thumb is to record so that it’s easy to edit later. 

As you continue along your voice acting journey, look for ways to “change up” the repetitive words and try not to fall into staccato/repetitive patterns when reading - this will help keep it interesting.

I noticed a lot of gaspy breaths in between the items read, so keep practicing the SOVT exercises to increase stamina. When recording, if you find the gasping breaths start to stand out you may want to look at lowering them during editing, or leave enough room between the gasping breaths and the next words so that the audio engineer can reduce or remove them. If breaths run into the next set of words and become harder to address you may need to do some pick-ups in certain scenarios. Breath control is definitely a tool to further refine in voice acting. 

You sound a little far from the microphone. Generally a good distance as a rule of thumb is the space between your pinky and thumb when they are extended apart from each other. When you’re ready to take the next step to improve your voiceover recording, you will want to look into treating your recording space with acoustic foam and/or blankets to help reduce the reflections and reverb in the space. It’s not necessary for this class however as we are focusing on the basics of voice acting.

For the purpose of this homework to work on projection, I felt you did an excellent job with it.

Overall, this was a nice smooth read and well enunciated/articulated. Very solid start! Great work!

Hey, you did really well. I liked the flow you maintained and the pitch. I'm totally new at this. So, this is my two cents worth. Good job.