Side note: I’m hearing a bit of plosives in your performance, particularly on P sounds. You may want to adjust your mic positioning slightly—try turning it to the side a bit or angling it slightly off-axis so that your breath isn’t hitting the mic directly. This should help reduce the popping effect without affecting clarity.

Overall, I really like this read! Your pronunciations are fairly good, though they feel slightly over-pronounced at times. It’s great to have clear articulation, but just be mindful that it doesn’t sound too rigid or unnatural. Let the words flow naturally, as if you’re telling a story rather than focusing on precision.

Your change-ups are strong, which is a great skill! The variety in your delivery keeps the read engaging, but they could be tightened up a bit for even more impact. Refining transitions between different tones will help make shifts in energy feel smoother and more intentional.

One area I’d love to see even more focus on is storytelling. The read was friendly and happy, which works well, but if you’re reading for children, don’t be afraid to get more animated! Kids love big emotions and expressive storytelling, so leaning into that will make your performance even more dynamic and engaging.

For example, when talking about Peter getting sad, let your performance reflect that emotion. Try slowing down, emphasizing certain words, and letting the tone naturally dip to show his disappointment. Then, when talking about getting happy again, bring that excitement into your voice!

All in all, this was a solid read! Keep working on mic placement, refining your change-ups, and fully embracing the storytelling aspect, and this will be even stronger. Great job!