Watch out for those T's being pronounced as D's like in Peter. Make sure you over articulate so that you hit every part of each word. The goal is the more you over articulate, the more it'll become part of you and eventually you won't even need to think about articulating and instead it just happens.

You have a nice, deep tone to your voice but for this, let's try to brighten it up a little and smile more so it fits a bit better. If your audience is kids, we want the tone to be lighter and more inviting vs a dramatic narration or something else.

Watch out for speeding up after you flub up. With Propitiated, you sped up more and more after flubbing it and kinda lost the flow you already had, so take a few seconds to reset and then restart from the beginning of that sentence. It also sounded like you were getting frustrated after that too so don't let flubs get to you. I've had sessions with directors where I flubbed one line about 15 times and it was still fine! You get it eventually!

Try to emphasize the emotions in certain moments more just so there's more variety in your tone. There's a lot of things you can add and change to give a more unique spin on this. Keep playing around and keep up the good work!